tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2135818393583916959.post2389288503481300781..comments2023-07-23T09:24:54.526-04:00Comments on A COLD RUSH OF AIR: HOW IT ENDSKevin Michaelshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00703125974467675009noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2135818393583916959.post-48575507031104304722014-03-10T16:27:19.002-04:002014-03-10T16:27:19.002-04:00That was a really great write, Kevin. I especially...That was a really great write, Kevin. I especially liked the downward spiral tone, the helplessness of the situation, which you built up good in the beginning by showing how much the MC tried to make his girlfriend happy, that worked well.<br /><br />Then, the switch at the end, from one girl being many, with the a list of names, was perfectly done, as well as the end. You didn't drown the story with a suicide, but at the same time, the swimming out into the ocean shows that something in him is dying or needs to. Excellent.EChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09359075647077590741noreply@blogger.com