Friday, November 12, 2010

ARCHER

On a two lane county road near Vineland, the skies that had been dark and threatening for hours finally opened up in a violent explosion of lightning and thunder cracks. Archer pulled into a small bar tucked beneath the highway overpass to shake off the rain and kill time. There were no more than a handful of people inside; nobody paid attention to him as he slid onto a bar stool and ordered a Jack Daniels. Quietly sipping his whiskey, he watched the redhead nearby nursing her own drink, finally chancing a smile when she glanced his way but she casually flipped the hair from her face and turned away from his stare. By the time she started gathering her things and saying good-byes to the people around her, Archer was already picturing the feel of his hands against her skin, the smell of her breath on his face, and the way her voice would sound when he held her close. He tossed a twenty on the bar, slipped his fingers around the switchblade in his coat pocket, and headed outside into the shadows of the parking lot to wait for her to leave.

5 comments:

Erin Cole said...

I'm betting the redhead has a bigger knife...or something better : )
Suspenseful and definitely creepy.

Bukowski's Basement said...

love the ambiance in this one, Kevin... love that jersey grit.

Mike Wilkerson said...

And Elmore Leonard says you can't start with weather...?

Dig the atmosphere.

Paul D. Brazill said...

Great hardboiled introduction to Mr Archer.

Kat said...

I wanna know what happens next! Red heads fight back, you know. ;)