Thursday, November 6, 2008

Things Unspoken (published in Six Sentences)

There’s something about the way he touches me every time that makes my heart skip a beat and pushes the air from my throat. I shiver under his hot breath while he whispers softly and pulls himself closer, letting his fingers glide along the curves of my skin. Later he will say what he thinks makes the hurt disappear and tell me again how everything will be all right if I give him not only my body but my trust as well. But when he’s done nothing that is said really matters that much. No matter how hard he tries explaining it in simple terms he thinks I can understand, I know that words don’t have the power to make you feel better – actions and intent cause pain and nothing changes that or takes away what is left. I think about his words sometimes at night once he’s left my room, and wonder what he says to my mother when he slips back in their bed after leaving mine.

2 comments:

Anonymous said...

Leatherdykeuk said...
Brilliantly written but how horrifying. Great 6.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 8:46:00 AM EDT


Martin said...
Superb piece. My condolences.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 9:11:00 AM EDT


Adam J. Whitlatch said...
Yeesh! Didn't see that coming! Well done, buddy! Another well-crafted Six.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 9:22:00 AM EDT


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Thursday, March 27, 2008 10:11:00 AM EDT


DOGZPLOT: an erratic literary montage said...
another solid six sentences - good job kevin

Thursday, March 27, 2008 10:12:00 AM EDT


Anonymous said...
Intense.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 10:15:00 AM EDT


Madam Z said...
Kevin's abuser should be hitched up to wild horses and torn into six pieces. Kevin should be given a gold medal for being able to write so beautifully about so ugly a past.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 10:19:00 AM EDT


Joe said...
Powerful and sad. A expertly written six by an expert Sixer. Raw and full of emotion. Hope this was just fiction. If not, healing can often start in expression or in writing, which is therapeutic in itself.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 10:22:00 AM EDT


reynolds said...
Wow. Incredibly powerful six.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 10:37:00 AM EDT


Quin Browne said...
we discuss our external scars, exposed or covered with colour...they distract people's attention from our internal ones.

well done, kevin.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 10:48:00 AM EDT


in search of hemingway said...
Not much more to say except Wow. Intense and powerfully. Great six!

Thursday, March 27, 2008 11:30:00 AM EDT


Kyle said...
Bravo.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 11:48:00 AM EDT


Darcy said...
Amazing....palbable...pain

Thursday, March 27, 2008 12:40:00 PM EDT


Anonymous said...
Not that is matters, but I believe Mr. Michaels is a good enough writer to not be speaking from personal experience. I think it is a little simplistic to assume that all 6's are non-fiction.

I loved the piece. The protagonist’s words are powerful unlike those of the abuser. Thanks!

Thursday, March 27, 2008 2:41:00 PM EDT


natasha said...
Excellent.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 3:06:00 PM EDT


a different anonymous said...
Interesting point by anonymous.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 3:19:00 PM EDT


Catherine said...
Wow. Just Wow.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 3:47:00 PM EDT


ThomG said...
Vivid, with a punch to the kidneys at the end. Just brilliant, powerful.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 5:55:00 PM EDT


Ted said...
Greatness.

Thursday, March 27, 2008 8:42:00 PM EDT


Kevin Michaels said...
Thanks to all for their comments. This is definitely a work of fiction - I actually wrote it from the POV of a young girl and trying to imagine the horror of a too-real/too-often heard situation (although based on some comments that certainly didn't come through in my narrative). All your comments/feedback are very much appreciated!
KM

Friday, March 28, 2008 3:17:00 PM EDT

Anonymous said...

Wow!